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Do you remember them, my friend?
Those shining days without an end?
When the aim of living was to play
‘Til in the arms of sleep you lay?
My clothes deep green, your dress the hue
Of early morning’s pale soft blue.
The sunshine on your golden hair,
A child dark and child fair.

We roamed under the forest’s trees,
Green leaves blowing in the breeze.
Do you remember games we played?
Tales we told and songs we made?
Remember you, remember me,
Remember peace’s melody.
Your breath seen in the cool clear air
A child dark and child fair.

Do you remember berry pies?
Deep discussion without lies?
Remember your small hand in mine
When we thought all things on earth were fine.
Remember days with pleasant rain,
Times with no loss and with no pain.
Black scarf you used to always tear,
A child dark and child fair.

Not something I could find again,
If I had one hundred thousand men.
Though we might search every single place
For a maiden wearing your fair face,
Alone I’ll not see one sky blue,
No deep night black, or soft gold too,
As pretty as the dress you wear,
Remember please, my child fair.
©2004-2009 ~Andilwen-Illiana
:iconandilwen-illiana:

Author's Comments

I wrote this in 8th grade, actually, and I have no clue why I thought of it. I was pretty pleased with how it came out though. Any thoughts would be appreciated.

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:iconsnowfaery:
Good heavens that is pretty!! Definately one of your best.

--
:snowflake:
Defy gravity
because there's
no day but today
:snowflake::heart::snowflake:
:iconandilwen-illiana:
Thank you! I think I've declined.

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I have a tendency to wear my mind on my sleeve
And I have a history of taking of my shirt...
--BNL
:iconprettypoetess2006:
I love that poem...reminds me of time I spent with childhood friends...sadly our friendships have drifted away, but like you I have many beautiful memories.

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"I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead;
I lift my lids and all is born again. "

~Sylvia Plath~
:iconandilwen-illiana:
Thank you!
Enjoy your memories. Think about those things whenever you can.

--
I have a tendency to wear my mind on my sleeve
And I have a history of taking off my shirt...
--BNL
:iconpanther420:
wow this is a really good poem....the structure is even and the punctuation is right down to the t. a few of the rhymes seem a tad forced but that pales in comparison to the overall all effect of the poem. the last lines of the last stanza get a little jarbled up. if there is any advice i could give about improving this poem it would be to elaborate more...the narrator does not tell us what happened to the friendship or the what became of the girl in question. of course I would not have any qualms about keeping it exactly the way you wrote it back in the 8th grade...great work i think im gonna have to give this one a fav

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"If ignorance is bliss, is it folly to be wise?"
:iconandilwen-illiana:
Thank you!!!
I definitely see the points of your criticisms too. I'll have to make up some of that stuff and then I'll try to write it.
You should post something.

--
I have a tendency to wear my mind on my sleeve
And I have a history of taking off my shirt...
--BNL

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